What do you think of this story, is it okay? 10 points?

you put "You no you can..." but it should have been spelt KnoW with a K at the beginning and a W at the end. secondly, your description is good, however you don't need that much description on the characters. the reader should create a picture in their mind of what they look like, without needing description. however, i like how there is lots of questions that have not been answered, it make the reader want to read on to find out more. this would be good as a prologue. over all, this is a good start. if it was published, i would read it. keep going :)